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Old 01-09-2007, 07:30 AM
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Preface: This was what I submitted to the 55 Words site.


The Final 7 Seconds

They sat in the hammock, watching the night sky. Tree frogs groaned elsewhere, sensing what awaited the world. When the blast came, the stars did not fall like shaken salt and the moon did not tremble. There was only the blooming of a violent red rose in the sky, the future of fire and life.

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Its nicely written; giving an air of what the evening was like, did you place others at the same time? If I remember right we could send four at one time
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That was very good, I liked it a lot, especially the title.

stars did not fall like shaken salt and the moon did not tremble.

f'ing right, bro. That was a great line. Best line I've read in a while. Maybe you would want to expand on the piece a little. I won't tell anyone if you do.

God Bless, keep writing.
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Thanks! And I have actually already stared building up a short story around this. The line "the future of fire and life" might actually become the title.
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