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Old 07-11-2012, 03:07 AM
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The broken teeth of slate and stone stand phalanx in the shroud
of still dank air that eerily, hovers o’er forgotten ground
the markers long surrendered, their legends worn by time
the life and loss recorded here, no longer come to mind

faded flowers and jaded stones, broken glass and urns
armless wingless angels, for conscience won’t atone
weathered names and epitaphs,their truth no longer sure
unread unknown unspoken, their history obscure

Hundreds thousands millions, condemned eternally
to lie forgotten in the mists, of cold obscurity
The what’s, the whys, the wherefores, slowly sinking in the fog
a convenient amnesia, like a shipwrecked captains log

Yet somewhere in the other world, their heirs still live and walk
Somewhere in that bequeathed state a conscience surely balks
A moment in a busy life, an hour of simple thought,
A day of quiet reflection, for the life these lives have bought

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Old 07-11-2012, 03:46 AM
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I like this, I really do, in fact I,m going to nominate it for MC.
One thing that I feel sits uncomfortably is history being obtuse, just seems to be ...somehow wrong.
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Old 07-11-2012, 04:34 AM
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Hey Peadar,
thanks for the read and comment, I did have a long look at obtuse at the time of writing and I felt it conveyed the meaning I intended, (Plus it made the rhyme) As the gravestone engravings are unreadable and uninteresting, even dull to the casual reader. Still I'll have another look at it, now that you say it, it does rankle a bit.
Done! Hopefully this is better.



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I agree, nice one Ethan.

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Hey Firehill,
sorted! thanks for the heads up,.
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