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Old 10-25-2013, 08:50 AM
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This idea that you have for me,
To be your golden child.
Itís absolutely fucking outrageous!
You donít realize it,
But itís contagious.
Itís a disease I swear,
And itís becoming utterly heinous.

You hoist me up on that golden pedestal,
And they all gaze at me,
Like Iím some kind of fucking spectacle.

Iím not a problem child,
But I donít care to be beguiled.
So just sit and think about that for a while

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Good rant yes? I'm taking it from child to parent but I guess it could apply universally.

Sometimes parents forget kids are human beings. Sounds outrageous, seems so simple,
got to live it to understand it. Then look back on it with guilty eyes.

Your rhyme good, message great. No fun to have people expect so much, in fact I think I ran scared,
in my time.

Thanks for the thoughts, I'll go apologize to my adult children, they have long been off the pedestal
and we have been eye to eye for awhile. Good write as usual vladimus,
you have your finger on the pulse.
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Old 10-26-2013, 04:04 PM
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Good rant yes? I'm taking it from child to parent but I guess it could apply universally.

Sometimes parents forget kids are human beings. Sounds outrageous, seems so simple,
got to live it to understand it. Then look back on it with guilty eyes.

Your rhyme good, message great. No fun to have people expect so much, in fact I think I ran scared,
in my time.

Thanks for the thoughts, I'll go apologize to my adult children, they have long been off the pedestal
and we have been eye to eye for awhile. Good write as usual vladimus,
you have your finger on the pulse.
Thanks for the view and feedback, I spoke mostly out of rage and experience, but it is what I felt. Glad you took the time to read it.
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Old 10-26-2013, 05:23 PM
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Normally I'll find one spag error in this many words, but not this time. It was quick and to the point, nice pace with the rhyming and I felt the anger seeping out. Good piece.
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Normally I'll find one spag error in this many words, but not this time. It was quick and to the point, nice pace with the rhyming and I felt the anger seeping out. Good piece.
Thanks man, I'm glad you were able to enjoy it.
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Bagit writes:
"Normally I'll find one spag error in this many words,"

What is a spag error?

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Old 10-28-2013, 04:58 PM
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Originally Posted by Delmar Cooper View Post
Bagit writes:
"Normally I'll find one spag error in this many words,"

What is a spag error?

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