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She's so cute I just wanna pluck her.

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LMAO! you guys are so cute. nicky, you can pluck me any day
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Outta my way, Colonel Sanders - I'm fixin' to get feathers in my teeth.
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why you gotta be so perky?
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A bard just lookin' to get his cluck on.
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cluck no further. im yourz.
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edit... i used to use my shiet....
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okay... here goes. let's test me out.

i'm the slimier mouth with more breathing.

Peace Sign Acoustic x Lights.3.26.18.m4a

i should have put this in the edit. nickita, tell me if you like my voice, since you missed all my other ones.
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okay... here goes. let's test me out.

i'm the slimier mouth with more breathing.

Peace Sign Acoustic x Lights.3.26.18.m4a

i should have put this in the edit. nickita, tell me if you like my voice, since you missed all my other ones.


Link goes to spam pages. No music, just lots of adds.


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https://soundcloud.com/vigor-elanska...ustic-x-lights

lol, u really really dig iphones. that's okay. i really really dig blackberry.
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https://soundcloud.com/vigor-elanska...ustic-x-lights

lol, u really really dig iphones. that's okay. i really really dig blackberry.


Heh... the control panel wonít let me permanently remove the iPhone tag. Wonít let me do lots of things.

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listen to the whole thing, would ya?
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I did

But only on my iPhone speaker. Iíll listen on the big stereo tomorrow.


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<2.5

what did you think? it's double vox
edit: like two different voices...

nicky, new pic on my soundcloud.
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It works. You could do more of this sort of thing with growing success I believe.

Pic shows your appearance maturing.

We could hang.
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Very good. You can def sing. Is this an original song?


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I think it's really good -- both the song and performance.

There are a bazillion people out there trying to do this kind of thing -- plaintive folky chick with a guitar -- and most of them are terrible -- and quite a few who've had some kind of success that aren't as good.

Hard to put my finger on it, but you've managed to avoid the cliches you usually get with this type of music -- especially the contrived "indie girl" voice -- although when you sing "disorder" it sounds affected in that way, especially at the end.

The simplicity of the guitar works well with the song -- there's a good rhythm and it's deliberate -- not like some of delicate scratching you often hear on your typical YouTube solo effort.

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Sorry chat, got slammed with work.

This is just beautiful. Really beautiful. Reminds me of a woman I once knew in Los Angeles. The way you phrase and the complicated rhythm that sounds simple, but isnít. Very, very nice. It almost sounds like itís in a funky time signature, but itís not.

Did you write and play guitar as well?

My only criticism is to ditch the doubled vocal. It detracts from the intimacy you have in your voice. Harmony maybe. Donít know if you can sing harmony, but if not, there are lots of people who can. You probably know some of them.




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Sorry chat, got slammed with work.

This is just beautiful. Really beautiful. Reminds me of a woman I once knew in Los Angeles. The way you phrase and the complicated rhythm that sounds simple, but isn’t. Very, very nice. It almost sounds like it’s in a funky time signature, but it’s not.

Did you write and play guitar as well?

My only criticism is to ditch the doubled vocal. It detracts from the intimacy you have in your voice. Harmony maybe. Don’t know if you can sing harmony, but if not, there are lots of people who can. You probably know some of them.




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I could see leaving the double vocal on the disorder/peace sign lines -- but I'd rather hear a harmony. Also, if you mix back one of the vocals it fattens it up without being so obvious. Probably doesn't need either.

I used to double track all my vocals when I was less confident about my voice -- I still do on some choruses -- but usually along with a harmony.


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@nicky, that's a really old pic of me..

thanks for listening guys?!

anyone have soundcloud?
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Yeah. I recall having seen it before.
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@nicky, that's a really old pic of me..

thanks for listening guys?!

anyone have soundcloud?


I do. I listened to the other two songs you have there. Ďzat you with the headphones?

So is this your solo stuff or is this a band or collective? You write the songs? Play the guitar and all?

You know a woman named Jen Olive(stage name)? You remind me of her.


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Heh (btw), listened to your likesóyou have terrible taste in music (😀😆&#128521.

Whatís wrong with these kids these days?


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But... Hotline Bling is bitchin. Made me get my fretless out.


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thanks! and the likes are to promote and have them follow back. i dont really like most of them. i dig the house stuff tho.
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