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Old 04-02-2014, 01:09 PM
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So I'm standin' there lookin' at this bike.

The saddle bags-
the saddlebags are sheathed in the palest leather I
ever seen.

Translucent almost.

And the seat-
at first I thought it was covered in sheepskin
(I seen that before)
but as I got closer I see it is fur.

White, short fur.


Now here comes this guy walkin' up.
I can tell it's his bike
(riders always sense this)
and I see he has one of those shark teeth
necklaces.

Looks like it goes completely around.

But the teeth-
they are skinnier and longer than the ones I seen
on fisher guys.

As he gets to me he unsnaps the ignition
key from his belt loop and holds it out
in his palm.

I see the key has a rabbit foot on it.

No, that ain't rabbit.

Looks like a dog paw maybe.
Small dog.


He says "Go ahead. Take it for a ride".

I do
(leavin' him the key to my scoot, of course).


When I come back he is talkin' to some
other guys who are standin' 'round
my sled.

That's when I see they are all patched.

Tilted tombstone emblem.

No Survivors arced over top.

Right Here across the bottom.


Even before I learned the teeth were
pulled from Vamps (and the bags covered
from same- must suck to be undead,
skinned and dentured) and the fob
was part of a albino
lycanthrope pup
I knew I found the club
I wanted to join.

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Old 04-04-2014, 12:56 AM
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Really enjoyed that Nick. Of all the pieces you have posted here over time, this is one of my favourites.
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Old 04-04-2014, 02:28 PM
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Wow that did not go where I thought it would, very nice. I was a bit thrown by the use of "I" where it felt like it should have been "I've" not sure if that is just how this character speaks or if this is my ignorance of proper grammar. I appreciate the spacing and to the point descriptions however with your writing skill I would have enjoyed a bit more depth. That being said I really enjoyed it.
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Here ya go, daes13.
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I read most of the stuff you post, Nick. Goddamn. It's good.

It's your voice.

I don't have any critiques. I just like it. A lot.
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I enjoy this poetic form of micro-story. Like it a lot.
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