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Old 03-26-2006, 12:13 PM
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Is It Worth It?


What if you choose to
buy into
This thing they call love?

Is it worth
What you get
In return?

Is it worth
Everything they say?

Is it worth
What you have to give up?

Your dignity
Your time
Your pride
Your affection

All for what?

Happily ever after always
Sounds so sweet
When youíre lookiní down the barrel
Of a gun
But what then
If you donít get the chance to meet
So you can greet

Your knight in shininí armor
Your prince charminí
What if you just get Yours Truly?

Are expectations something we expect?
Or is it expected of us that we
Accept
What we get,

This lot in life
These roads we walk
The choices we make
Do we create
Or is it made
Tailor made
To just
Annoy
Disappoint?

Can someone explain?
Can someone clarify?
If you will
How it seems
To always seem
To go this way

First step :
First kiss
First love
I love you

Second Step :
Second Problem
Second Fight
Itís becoming issue
To kiss you.
Any time,
All the time.
Why you pulliní away girl?
I love you

Third Step :
Last Night
Last Fight
Last Kiss
GOODNIGHT
I STILL LOVE YOU

But
Thereís a snag
In this master plan
Thereís a jam
In this machine

You

DONíT

Love

Me

But how could it ever be
How could you ever see
Me
In a light
Other than just another Joe?

One that canít measure up
Ever
But Iíll promise you this
I will try
Forever
And ever
To earn whatever
Whether
It be
Trust,
Love,
Friendship,
Attention.

Attention!

Attention!

Hear this!
I wonít stop
I canít
Iíve tried
Itís no use
I keep falliní back

Falliní down

Down

Down

Back to where I was
Where We were
You were
Were you?
Where I was?
When we were
Us?

I donít know
It seemed
As though
You were
Where I was
But now
Everything
Is not
What it seems

Perhaps
You werenít even
THERE
To begin
You just
Put me
Where
You wanted me to be
Where you needed me to be
But baby
You never let me
Be
ALL
I could be

I want you to realize
To believe
Completely
That what I say
Is not
What I mean
What I want
To say
Is so much
But itís quite simple
Quite elementary
My
Dear
Itís just

One thing

A Single Ideal

Encapsulated
Contained
Personified in

Just
Four
Little
Words

I still love you.

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Old 03-27-2006, 06:21 AM
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this i a nice write. however love even the thought of it makes me ill. keep up the great work
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Old 03-27-2006, 09:22 AM
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Love makes you give up your dignity and pride? Even the thought of love makes you ill?

I thought I was unlucky in love, but you two must have had much worse experiences than me.

Is love worth it? I guess not if you honestly feel like you have expressed yourselves.
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Old 03-27-2006, 09:46 AM
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Haha, don't get me started.


Seriously. DON'T, the stories this old heart of mine could tell if it could but speak.
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Old 03-27-2006, 10:48 AM
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I don't consider myself much of a judge of poetry, but I like this. You were able to keep me reading, an impressive feat for such a long poem.

I especially like this stanza:
Back to where I was
Where We were
You were
Were you?
Where I was?
When we were
Us?
One thing: I don't think ALL-CAPS are necessary for any of your words. It kind of took away from the overall flow.

Thanks for sharing!
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This is worth the bump. Great work. Kinda long, but a good read. Good work.
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i liked it, some nice rhymes thrown in and no effort put in the structure; however, i think you could have combined some of the lines to make it read smoother -- just an opinion.. anyway i agree with evrything thats been said so far.. good stuff, even if it's a lil melancholy
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Old 05-06-2006, 09:05 PM
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good write.
as said above, all caps not necessary and it detracts from the poem. italics may work better if you really want to emphasize something, but those can overused just as easily.
anyways, nice read, i liked it a lot.
not sure if i agree...but that could be because i'm in a relationship...who knows.
love (haha) to see more
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