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Can You Come Out And Play?

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Old 02-23-2013, 05:14 AM
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Knock...Knock..Knock,

Can you come out and Play?

Steal the key from the warden.
Unlock the shackle that keep you trapped inside.

It's a beautiful day
Come out and play?

Don't hanging silently on the wall with the other wall flowers.
It's time to break free and express your self.

Don't be afraid to sing a different tune.
We are not all created to be the same at this elevation.

So you don't have to play it safe .
You can buck against the hypnotic beat that is echoing through the radio and the television stations .

Can you come out and play?

Don't be afraid to go against the flow of yesterday.
To day is a gift from God to make a new vibration.
It's time to go out and play.

Life is like playing a musical instrument in a hall.
The walls are people.
the hall is time.

Be wise in the song you play,
For your words and actions will echoing off the people and be carried down through the halls of time.

Knock...Knock..Knock,
Can you come out and Play?

Will you make A difference today?

Written by Stephen J. Vattimo
Feb 18 2013

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Old 11-21-2013, 09:17 AM
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I love your screen name fits perfectly with your poem Can You Come Out and Play?

A childlike title, innocent and well remembered by us all, caught my eye.
The connection to an unseen only felt world is beautiful. Words choices bring this theme to life. Analogies of what our senses find and the halls of Time images are great. I love the elevation thought and the positive feel to our gifts from God.

Final line . . .
Will you make A difference today? makes the reader want to, it is motivating. Well done Stephen J Vattimo, you got me thinking and feeling,
thank you!
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