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Old 05-28-2016, 12:42 PM
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So sometime in the future, I want to own my own television show and this is a plot-heavy cartoon show that I want to have produced. It's gonna either be called "Eyes Wide Shut" or "The Hoi Polloi". I wrote the script to the pilot episode and would like someone to read it and critique it for me.

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renters, re-enters maybe - I got very confused.

it reads very nice, the type of story I could get into.

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Are you talking about when they tried going back to the cave?
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Yeah, I wasn't really too sure about that part myself. I feel like I needed some type of filler so I could pace the story a little better.
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Giving this a little bump
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It was good


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