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Old 09-22-2016, 09:20 PM
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Default God of Constellations


Don't speak;
The world has forgotten that you exist
hidden among stars and galaxies,
dancing with rainbow nebulae,
tossing meteors across an endless sky.

In your silence you become limitless.
Infinity runs through your veins,
sunshine in your hair.

Time keeps you company, moving like water
between your fingers,
nestling upon your shoulder,
strung like pearls around your neck.

You open your mouth and
instead of sound, light pours out;
The stars listen,
planets and moons look your way and
where you step footprints are left behind.
Where your hands reach and your
fingers touch beings will sing your praises.

Don't speak;
You are a Watcher,
eyes all-seeing,
heart thumping loud enough to shake the sky,
strong enough to control silvery tides in
far away worlds.

You wear Saturn's rings as bracelets
hanging from your wrists.
Europa and Io adorn your ears, shimmering and
shining like opals.

If you could glimpse your reflection you would wonder at
your skin's magnificent translucence, marvel at
the stars glittering through your chest.

You are an artist, stringing together the
Universe, telling the tales of worlds you have been
admiring since the beginning.

Sometimes you think it will destroy you to
hear words floating into your atmosphere,
pleading for favors,
telling secrets,
giving thanks.

You wish that you could tell them that you do
not control their fates,
you only paint them across the night sky in
Constellations,
giving infinity to their names until they too become
nameless, watching silently,
forgetting their tongues as
unseen gods.

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Old 09-23-2016, 06:59 AM
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I love poetry that deals with astronomy.
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WOW !

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This poem is amazing.

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Agree with NuNu...wow! Pieces like this make me think that I should be a restaurant dishwasher and give up writing.
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Old 08-27-2017, 09:15 PM
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KBR- haha please don't! You are definitely talented. I just get lucky sometimes
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Haven't read anything this good in a while...I just loved it...The piece felt so massive as if I was spread across the galaxy watching you as you wrote it.
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I enjoyed this poem very much, and think that it could use a bit of tightening up in terms of the length and format. This would be a fantastic paragraph poem, condensed to a printed page would make this poem something publishable -- Sci-fi /astro. poetry is in
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You are all fucking idiots, not that this is not good, but that you are all so weak:-

The world has forgotten that you exist
hidden among stars and galaxies,
dancing with rainbow nebulae,
tossing meteors across an endless sky.

In your silence you become limitless.
Infinity runs through your veins,
sunshine in your hair.

Time keeps you company, moving like water
between your fingers,
nestling upon your shoulder,
strung like pearls around your neck.

You open your mouth and
instead of sound, light pours out;
The stars listen,
planets and moons look your way and
where you step footprints are left behind.
Where your hands reach and your
fingers touch beings will sing your praises.

Don't speak;
You are a Watcher,
eyes all-seeing,
heart thumping loud enough to shake the sky,
strong enough to control silvery tides in
far away worlds.

You wear Saturn's rings as bracelets
hanging from your wrists.
Europa and Io adorn your ears, shimmering and
shining like opals.

If you could glimpse your reflection you would wonder at
your skin's magnificent translucence, marvel at
the stars glittering through your chest.

You are an artist, stringing together the
Universe, telling the tales of worlds you have been
admiring since the beginning.

Sometimes you think it will destroy you to
hear words floating into your atmosphere,
pleading for favors,
telling secrets,
giving thanks.

You wish that you could tell them that you do
not control their fates,
you only paint them across the night sky in
Constellations,
giving infinity to their names until they too become (this all feels hackneyed and uncomfortable)
nameless, watching silently, (this all feels great).
forgetting their tongues as
unseen gods.

The fools who are telling you otherwise need to learn what the fuck lessons learned are.
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@ Chinspinner

Delete your last comment here as well.

I don't know what you THINK you've said - but what you've written is:

"I'm a troll. I'm bitter and lonely. I destroy anything that jars with my own self-loathing."

You're in shitsville. If you want to chat - PM me. Send me pages of insults if you like -fine by me. Here if you want to talk.

Delete your last comment and I'll delete this one.
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I am discovering this bit by bit. Apologies yet again.
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Originally Posted by Chinspinner View Post
I am discovering this bit by bit. Apologies yet again.

Want to delete? Then I'll delete my response.

Good as new.
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