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Old 05-23-2014, 12:58 PM
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She came upon us with a force that belittles
hurricanes

Her writing- the withering, gatling staccato
meter-
it was irresistible

I, along with scores of others, would log on
daily to see if she had posted

The view number would spin upward
like the odometer on a cross country
rocket car

Her prose would reach down behind your
waistband and
move you with a
supple talented hand

She was a teenaged Libertine
who penned passion better than any
Lothario could live it

And then there was Gomez
A work that was crafted in a day that will stand for decades

It was an exhilarating era at the Beat


Eventually (and everything happens eventually)
some took umbrage with her musing

The focus shifted from frenzied frothing to
futile flaming

A few more pieces, pieces that explored
growth with the forms, and *blip*
she was gone

And time went on
And she turned twenty one and no
longer had to cage alcohol

And I wondered if she had found a bar
to live in
(many of us enter this phase, eh Hank?)

And if she had I wondered if she would
come back out
(some of us never ... you get it)


A month ago, while riding my bicycle
past the bus depot, I saw a
young, slim barefoot white girl with
multicolored hair

She was makin' for the derelict group

I wondered, for a moment, if it was
her

If she had come south to Florida

And I wondered if she had taken up
dancing
(yeah- the exotic "art" type)


Then there! -a comment (rare enough
from her during the heyday) on the poetry
forum


So now I know she has survived
So now I can feel a little green
shoot of optimism slipping up through
the sludge of these times

A one leafed weak tendril in the crisp chill dawn
that waits to see if she will bring it on

Again

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Old 05-23-2014, 03:03 PM
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Great tribute Nick. I love to see dedications to other members like this.
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I only caught the tail end of Beefheart and still felt the loss.

PickleBottom
Beefheart
Nick Pierce

There are more, but these three stand out in my memories of my first days here, so real in their surrealism.
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Beefheart
Ink
Waterpoor
Ethan Blake
Grace Gabriel
There are more. But these sprang to mind without effort. Each one was the loss of an appendage or organ of the senses.

A worthy tribute Nick! How could anyone who remembers her do anything but agree.
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This is strange at best. But cool to see you branch out. BTW I didn't type the rude comment in your last post. I left my account signed on and my friend wrote down what I said to her, word for word.
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What's beefheart?
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Beefheart is a poet. She's a no holds barred, in your face, raw emotion force of nature kind of poet.

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This is strange at best. But cool to see you branch out. BTW I didn't type the rude comment in your last post. I left my account signed on and my friend wrote down what I said to her, word for word.
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Dang it, Nick. You stole some of my thoughts. It's okay, though; I wouldn't have used them to create a poem about WB poets. Many times I read posts here that make me wonder about someone who wrote in a similar manner. The board culture changes daily, often for the good. Sometimes we even get to see the diamond in the rough shaped into beautiful jewelry. Thanks.
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Beefheart is a poet. She's a no holds barred, in your face, raw emotion force of nature kind of poet.
is she well-known? Her pen name is Beefheart?
what the...
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It's her 'beat' name. I use my initials and your use a rearrangement of your name, but some folks pick other things. I always thought that this is what she meant http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Captain_Beefheart. But I'm so often wrong about anything remotely cool or modern that I stay quiet while others carry on the banter.

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Originally Posted by KBR View Post
It's her 'beat' name. I use my initials and your use a rearrangement of your name, but some folks pick other things. I always thought that this is what she meant http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Captain_Beefheart. But I'm so often wrong about anything remotely cool or modern that I stay quiet while others carry on the banter.
It just dawned on me where I'd heard the name before. Captain Beefheart was somewhat of a celebrity in the music and art world around here. He lived right up the coast and died in the same hospital my oldest daughter was born in.

A person would have to be pretty confident in their abilities to take on such a name.
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She is very talented. Speaking from my own experience, there have been times in my life when I wrote nothing for long periods. Then, at some point my muse catches up with processing and stuff comes pouring out. I expect we will hear from Ms. Beefheart again.
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I can't wait to look up some of her work! Your poem is amazing, Nick Pierce! How fortunate Beefheart is to have such a beautiful poem paying homage to her!
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Old 05-31-2014, 11:01 PM
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Originally Posted by juicyfruit View Post
I can't wait to look up some of her work! Your poem is amazing, Nick Pierce! How fortunate Beefheart is to have such a beautiful poem paying homage to her!

Naah, not homage.
Not "credit where credit is due".

When one writes from the hara (and sees a comment from her) this sort of post
comes like wet with the rain.
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I kind of hate to be 'that guy', but the grammar could use some re-tooling.
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Originally Posted by <3Less View Post
I kind of hate to be 'that guy', but the grammar could use some re-tooling.
I cordially invite you to repost the piece with your "re-tooling" incorporated.

It was Gandhi who said "Be the change that you seek" and I support both myself and you in our efforts to such ends.
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Originally Posted by Nick Pierce View Post
I cordially invite you to repost the piece with your "re-tooling" incorporated.

It was Gandhi who said "Be the change that you seek" and I support both myself and you in our efforts to such ends.
So gracious and...ethereal.
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Strange that maidahl doesn't seem to know which poster is referenced here, they talked quite a lot.

I remember when she had Beef (see what I did there?) with the late Lin, who was not nearly as taken by her work. But most people responded to her stuff with great appreciation.
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She came upon us with a force that belittles
hurricanes.

Her writing—the withering, gatling staccato
meter—
it was irresistible.

I, along with scores of others, would log on
daily to see if she had posted.

The view number would spin upward
like the odometer on a cross country
rocket car.

Her prose would reach down behind your
waistband and
move you with a
supple talented hand.

She was a teenaged Libertine
who penned passion better than any
Lothario could live it,

and then there was Gomez,
a work that was crafted in a day that will stand for decades.

It was an exhilarating era at the Beat.


Eventually (and everything happens eventually)
some took umbrage with her musing.

The focus shifted from frenzied frothing to
futile flaming.

A few more pieces, pieces that explored
growth with the forms, and *blip*,
she was gone.

Time went on;
she turned twenty one, and no
longer had to cage alcohol.

I wondered if she had found a bar
to live in
(many of us enter this phase, eh Hank?),

and if she had, I wondered if she would
come back out.
(Some of us never ... you get it).


A month ago, while riding my bicycle
past the bus depot, I saw a
young, slim, barefoot, white girl with
multicolored hair.

She was makin' for the derelict group.

I wondered, for a moment, if it was
her,

if she had come south to Florida,

and I wondered if she had taken up
dancing
(yeah, the exotic "art" type).


Then there! A comment (rare enough
from her during the heyday) on the poetry
forum.


So now I know she has survived.
So now I can feel a little green
shoot of optimism slipping up through
the sludge of these times.

A one-leafed, weak tendril in the crisp, chill dawn
that waits to see if she will bring it on.


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Ghandi sounds like an awfully nice guy. Looks like we could all learn from him.

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Originally Posted by <3Less View Post
She came upon us with a force that belittles
hurricanes.

Her writing—the withering, gatling staccato
meter—
it was irresistible.

I, along with scores of others, would log on
daily to see if she had posted.

The view number would spin upward
like the odometer on a cross country
rocket car.

Her prose would reach down behind your
waistband and
move you with a
supple talented hand.

She was a teenaged Libertine
who penned passion better than any
Lothario could live it,

and then there was Gomez,
a work that was crafted in a day that will stand for decades.

It was an exhilarating era at the Beat.


Eventually (and everything happens eventually)
some took umbrage with her musing.

The focus shifted from frenzied frothing to
futile flaming.

A few more pieces, pieces that explored
growth with the forms, and *blip*,
she was gone.

Time went on;
she turned twenty one, and no
longer had to cage alcohol.

I wondered if she had found a bar
to live in
(many of us enter this phase, eh Hank?),

and if she had, I wondered if she would
come back out.
(Some of us never ... you get it).


A month ago, while riding my bicycle
past the bus depot, I saw a
young, slim, barefoot, white girl with
multicolored hair.

She was makin' for the derelict group.

I wondered, for a moment, if it was
her,

if she had come south to Florida,

and I wondered if she had taken up
dancing
(yeah, the exotic "art" type).


Then there! A comment (rare enough
from her during the heyday) on the poetry
forum.


So now I know she has survived.
So now I can feel a little green
shoot of optimism slipping up through
the sludge of these times.

A one-leafed, weak tendril in the crisp, chill dawn
that waits to see if she will bring it on.


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Ghandi sounds like an awfully nice guy. Looks like we could all learn from him.

Now I see what you meant.
Thanks.

And, regarding ol' Mohandas, legend has him, as he lay gunshot dying, blessing the shooter.

Anger has always been more dangerous than death, eh?


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Originally Posted by Nick Pierce View Post
Now I see what you meant.
Thanks.

And, regarding ol' Mohandas, legend has him, as he lay gunshot dying, blessing the shooter.

Anger has always been more dangerous than death, eh?


Thanks again.
I really did learn something. I thought Mahatma was his real name, not just an honorific that stuck with him.
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Nice work NP...
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Nick, are you enamored of this author.

Nah, Mr. Pierce.
I'm entranced.

Nick, you do realize the entire world can see this, don't you?


Doesn't matter, Mr. P.
I'm proud of my passion for this person ... for her work.
And anyone got a problem with that I got two words for them.
And they ain't Happy Birthday.

Okay, Nick.
I, as some people say, I feel ya.

Word, P., word.
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Very beautifully written.
My best work always comes forth when I am inspired.
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My best work always comes forth when I am inspired.
Evidently.

This soars on wings.
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