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Old 05-19-2014, 09:23 AM
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They want (the readers of poetry) to see
rhymes

And pictures (as they sit on their flabby cheeks,
jaw slack and eyes twitching in time with their
fingertip's keyboard machinations)

And of course that is all very well, I muse
(while sitting on this hard white
horseshoe as a nether part apes the
action of a projectile vomiting goldfish mouth)


But where is the place the fire from the guts
gets woven into the quilt of commonality

How does a man express that holding on to
his sanity, his inner peace, is akin to
stuffing a honey badger into the left front
pants pocket, jamming a rutting wolverine
into the right one and then strolling
down a sunny Sunday city sidewalk

Smiling and nodding to all pedestrian
passerby
while feigning no preoccupation with
the immediate circumstances of existing
in this Mad Clown Miasma of a World


I suppose some things are easier asked
than answered


Ow!
Something just bit me

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You've got a real knack at that picturesque writing there, Nick old boy. You've put your gonads in quite a spot.
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ditto that you do have a way Nick Pierce, I almost feel ashamed of reading and wanting to. We want more though you know.

I'll say great pictures while feeling the pain.
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I've been stuck in mediocre for so long Nick. I took inspiration from your work for 'Possessed'. The gritty quality of your pieces slaps you out of poetic complacency. Everyone comes to a poem with so many ideas about the look and feel of 'poem'. You change it up. Engines roar, guns fire and wolverines bite your ball sack...and that's the first stanza! Thanks Nick! I needed the kick in the ass!
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...Jaw slack and eyes twitching...

I live in hope that my eyes are still twitching.
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poignant and really quite touching in the beginning. It kinda trails off at the end. Maybe the title could use a little work?

Sweet line breaks! Really different than what I'm used to reading. I guess I haven't read a post by you in a while.
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I like this poem, your strategy was more direct than evasive. I like. Keep it up.
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Fucking poets, indeed.
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This spoke to me sir. The shit about imagery and momentous occasions etc. But where is the gut? The visceral realism? Thank,you
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Wow. Actual, literal toilet humor. I suppose it was only a matter of time.

A layer of complexity and depth is added to this poem as the commenters affirm it.
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Wow. Actual, literal toilet humor. I suppose it was only a matter of time.

A layer of complexity and depth is added to this poem as the commenters affirm it.


I like working with what is available.
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But where is the gut? The visceral realism?

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Reminds me of Thoreau. Judgement of others, then madness of his own self and facsimile (oh brother, really?). But I like Thoreau's vision better, as he has a nicer view of nature.
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