Hi deveaushawn! Good job getting both in one poem. The metaphor is--as usual--a little more slippery than the simile.
Good images. I especially like "a young man's blood / an old man's brain"... it really captures the idea of being torn, vacillating back and forth like waves.
I notice you use no punctuation. That seems like a good counterpart to the ceaseless action of waves... but perhaps you could put a period after "and walk away". It would stand out really well in the absence of anything alse, and it would emphasize finality.
Thanks for posting!
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