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Old 10-02-2008, 11:54 PM
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Default Cinquain - Night


Deep sleep.
Insomnia.
Step-brother syndrome.
But where is the sleeping pill-ow?
Lights out.

Dream.
Black and White.
Rapid Eye Movement.
Will it ever end?
Life.

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Old 10-04-2008, 07:26 AM
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Ah, you tried both styles, I see! I liked the didactic one best. You start with "dream" and I expect happiness and rainbows. Instead, you surprise me with a sense of weariness. Then equating "dream" and "life"... interesting! Perhaps I'd like the Crapsey cinquain more if I knew what "step-brother syndrome" is. I googled it and got a few football sites. Anyway, thanks for posting! Did you enjoy working with the cinquain form?
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hehe, ya it was fun. I wanna try the other forms too.

step-brother syndrome is something i cooked up to say how sleep and insomnia can be seen as children of the same mother (night) but dont quite get along.
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