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Old 08-07-2017, 12:17 PM
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True love is like a ghost,—
—One everyone has spoken of
—And one that few have seen.
Monsters are real though,
And so are ghosts.—
They live inside of us
And some of the time—
They seem to win;—

The Helicons of too many writers
—Is not a hill crowned with sunshine
And visited—by the Muse of Graces,
But an old, moldering house,—
Full of gloom and haunted within;

—The statues—of Lenin and Stalin
All are sunken in and down,—
But the fight against each one
Seems harder to struggle against;
But when it’s all so easily worded;
I love crime, I love a good mystery,—
And I definitely needed a ghost.—

author's note: i needed a better title and i just made it kinda random. any ideas?

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Old 08-07-2017, 01:07 PM
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Chat...this is really good.

Quite possibly the best poem you have ever posted.

It's coherent and clearly expressed - a change from your usual abstract imagery.

Yep. You've just blown my socks off lady x

P.S: Missing y on the end of "they live inside of us."
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Old 08-07-2017, 03:38 PM
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nice link, brainy brian. thanks gracey!!!! i was trying this time... lol. sometimes i post feather-brained. and nice catch! just corrected it. how's ur cat?
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Old 08-09-2017, 05:56 AM
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I like this one too, chat bot.

But man -- all that punctuation kind of hurts my eyes...
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I’ve said what needs be said about your punctuation and dash fetish.

Monsters are real though
so are the ghosts

Don’t know what hellcons are, and I’m not sure about writers.

The repeat of but in stanza3 doesn’t help the flow

Footsteps Through The Kremlin or
Shadows In The Kremlin


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nice link, brainy brian. thanks gracey!!!! i was trying this time... lol. sometimes i post feather-brained. and nice catch! just corrected it. how's ur cat?
Still doing pretty well. Bless you for asking x
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