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Old 05-19-2018, 03:21 PM
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Out the westward door into the infernal howling of dry wind and gray-slicked Coyote shadows, hunting yesterday's promises like the bargain of leftovers and day old bread. Sharpened, ridiculed, hungry, scedaddling toward the relentless mirage of eternal hope, where heat spills over the horizon, like a drunken Eskimo making his slow journey toward Mecca to die. He kills the dastard leprechauns who stand in his way, the malcontent fairies also, the weak-willed giants who grown fat on the morsels of the weak, and the tyrant saints with their mendicant sycophants. Between gulps of chili sauce and testicle ice-cream, he sniffs in the air of stale lies, the precursory chants designed to drive the masses toward certain intended and unintended consequences. He dodges the cool gazes of statesmen whores, who've commoditized desire to the lowest bidder and depression in her afterthought. The tongue offers singers while the poet malingers.


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Old 05-20-2018, 07:44 AM
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The ending saved the piece. It's a little clunky at the outset
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Coming from Bigfoot country, I'd say you've got it spot-on.

That said, I'd scrap that first paragraph. I know you're trying to explain yourself to us, but you can do that in the IT or the Cafe, and it doesn't add to the story.

Pretty funny, otherwise, and as someone who theoretically lives right in the middle of them, I'd say it's a perfectly plausible scenario.
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I sometimes listen to Coast to Coast. They actually believe BigFoot is real.
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