An old Concept of mine...

[Refusing_A_Name]

I got this idea from an old notebook I found. This idea is more than year old. Tell me what you think of the characther and what to do improve her.

• This girl is about 22-23 years old.

• A tall thin girl that’s about 5”8’ to 5”7’

• Beautiful, but looking at her most people would think she looks plain.

• Long hair done in French, braid.

• Light brown hair with traces of blond hair.

• Her face is slightly round.

• Baby blue eyes or brown eyes.

• Cute raspy voice.

• Everybody hates her due to her Childish nature, lack of maturity and poor teaching skills.

• As a bad habit she smokes whenever she’s alone.

• She acts more like she’s 16 rather 22-23 years old.

• Bearly noticeable double chin.

[starpanda]

I guess I would have to respond in the reverse of what I said to adamg a moment ago, ...she is possibly an intriguing character, but its hard to tell, as she is not in context with any plot.

At the moment it is a bit like looking at a photograph of a woman we don't know yet and hearing a little bit of gossip about her. To make her live and breathe you need to tell us her story.

What is going to be her main purpose in the story/poem/script?

[Cordatus]

Ditto starpanda.

[OnceUponATime]

Good character sketch, but those are just physical stats. Ask yourself the folowing when it comes to this character:
What is her name?
Where does she live and how long has she lived there?
How has her environment affected her inside?
Who are her family members/friends?
What does her house look like (Inside and Outside)?
What are her likes and dislikes?
What is she afraid of?
What does she want most in life?
Is she embarrassed about her looks/tallness?
Does she have a physical or mental quirk of some kind?
Is there someone she loves but doesn't return her affection?
What does she do for a living?
Does she want respect from her peers but doesn't get it because of her childish behaviour?

If you've got a solid view of her in your mind, then try to get into her head. Write all this stuff down and sooner or later a story will start to develop, especially if you find out her goals in life. What are they? How does she go about about trying to achieve them? What things or people stand in her way? Answer these kind of questions and you will see your story form right before your eyes.

Best wishes,
Jillian