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Old 09-26-2007, 09:21 AM
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The devil’s brew, is beer my friend
May it pour forever, and never end
I pray it fills you with blurry bliss
As you fill your john with once-beer piss

Be it beer or ale both light and dark
Drunk in a pub, a bar, or a park
In a longneck, mug, or pint-sized glass
As long as it knocks you on your ass

The more you drink, the louder you talk
Each subsequent beer wobbles your walk
Everyone there becomes your buddy
The river of reason becomes muddy

But this beverage doesn’t come from hell
Though drinking it makes your head swell
‘Cause Satan wouldn’t give us pleasure
With luscious drink, this liquid treasure

Nectar from heaven, a gift to us beasts
From the gods of malt and brewer’s yeasts
And who in the world would have thunk
That it would taste so good getting drunk

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Old 09-26-2007, 02:44 PM
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Love it, Gary.
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Old 09-26-2007, 06:43 PM
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I love this poem and share your enthusiasm for beer.
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Old 09-26-2007, 07:47 PM
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This was fantastic, Gary. =)

[SIGN]Thanks for sharing. =)[/SIGN]
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Old 09-26-2007, 11:25 PM
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"Beer is proof that God loves us and wants us to be happy." -- Benjamin Franklin
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Old 09-27-2007, 04:02 AM
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Thanks, Icarus.

It's amazing that there are people who don't like beer, isn't it, O'Connell?

Thanks, Chloe.

Starrwriter, I think I'm going to make that quote into a sign and post it at the Elk's bar where I put most of my beer away these days. Thanks.
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Old 09-27-2007, 07:35 AM
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Starrwriter, I think I'm going to make that quote into a sign and post it at the Elk's bar where I put most of my beer away these days.
It's one of my few religious beliefs.
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Old 09-27-2007, 09:59 AM
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Hey Gary,


I would not be the worlds biggest beer fan, but of your poem I am.


Nice one, cheers.

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Old 09-27-2007, 10:10 AM
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Starrwriter, everyone needs some kind of religion.

Thanks, Lorlie. I always say, those that don't like beer just haven't given it enough of a chance. My wife won't drink it, but that just leaves more for me.
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Old 09-27-2007, 12:04 PM
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Love it, Gary, almost as much as I love beer.
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Old 10-02-2007, 05:09 AM
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It reads as forced and the metre isn't regular. The language is childish.
Nectar from heaven a gift for us beasts // reads as clunky
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Old 10-02-2007, 09:29 AM
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Thanks, IIG. It reads better when the reader is half crocked.
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Old 10-09-2007, 10:28 PM
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the word subsequent doesnt seem to match the simplicity of the rest of the poem, and I didn't quite get the transition from it being a hellish drink to one of heaven. I do like beer though!!
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Old 10-11-2007, 06:45 AM
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Thanks, K.C. Though the drink may be from heaven, the results can be pretty hellish - especially the morning after.
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Old 10-11-2007, 03:30 PM
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Old 10-17-2007, 01:18 PM
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I liked this poem. I liked it a lot. I thought it read fine, sober. Better drunk, of course. Nice work, Gary.
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Old 10-18-2007, 04:13 AM
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Thanks, Kal. If you can't knock it that implies that you have tried it. I'll never understand drinking it warm, though.

Thanks, Andrew. I like to have a little fun with what I write once in a while.
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Old 11-08-2007, 07:34 PM
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I'm normally not a fan of meter and rhyme, but this was hilarious! I'm not a drinker (last time I drank beer, I got stung by a bee afterwards and swelled up so bad, I wound up in the hospital, so there's bad connotations for me), but I have friends who are avid drinkers and who'd love it!
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Old 11-09-2007, 06:37 AM
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Sorry about the bee sting. Glad you enjoyed this. My beer drinking buddies got a kick out of it. Thanks, ILoveKitties03.
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Old 11-09-2007, 07:26 AM
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Not too crazy about beer, love the poem though. Kudos!
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Old 11-09-2007, 07:50 PM
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Glad my sillly little ditty has given some people a chuckle. Thanks, Kelose.
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