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03-12-2013, 02:26 AM
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Cinquain - Despair
Despair
The hunt For purpose, drive, Passion... lonely, shady... My light ran out, I have fallen Face down.
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03-12-2013, 03:56 AM
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Not my cup of tea but it seems competent enough. The last line, as a synonymic summing-up of the title, is excellent.
Not too sure how L2 works as a description of the title though. Can I suggest that perhaps a little assonance and a smidge of alliteration would bring a greater unification to the piece. As I said, these forms aren’t for me, but good work. xDrew
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