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Old 10-19-2012, 05:57 AM
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Bukowski once pointd out
(he had overheard his mother in law complaining)
that the reason he used such coarse language
(in the course of prosaic discourse)
was to aggravate the woman whining

Now, I know my subjects of production
have wrinkled a few noses

And I will own up to intent
Intent that presents a scent
A scent that gets attention going

But this is where I and the dead guy
fork off
divergent

I've never heard my mother in law speak
And, although I believe she sometimes speaks of me
I'm sure I would not understand a word
if I heard
(yeah, right- I'm the only one here who ain't
conversant in Tagalog)

So y'all can be sure I ain't dissin no family

However, you, dear reader, are fair game for all manner
of induced outrage

And, after reading the very first word of
this bit
(Bukowski),
you didn't stop,
I do gleefully infer
you are askin' for it

Okay, the window is open
The birds are chirpin'
The fan is blowin'
and I'm out of crap
(for now)

Time to get up
clean up
flush and flounce off
into the new day

Tra La de fukkin' Da

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Old 10-23-2012, 10:41 AM
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Nick,
I usually prefer the author to not call any attention to himself, just let the words speak for themselves. In this case however I enjoyed you turning to speak to me, your reader. I felt included, perhaps even targeted by your words.

I'm not familiar enough with Bukowski to say you sound like him but, well, you do. Not that you hate people. But he did, or at least his work created a "persona" who hated humanity. Yet there was always something in his stuff that implied he was trying to escape his own humanity--a kind of art imitating life and life imitating art. Or so it seemed to me.

Thanks, I enjoyed this--asked me to invest a bit of myself to get through it. Good writing always invites us to look inside for what a poem or story means. And how it means is important too. I think your what and how worked well together. Thanks for posting it...

Bill
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Old 10-23-2012, 01:48 PM
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It is a common perception that Hank hated people.

More clearly - here, allow me to quote the curmudgeon: "I don't hate people. I just feel better when they aren't around".

And as for one of us being similar to the other- wait a sec., I covered this in a different piece.

Not enough time to bore with redundancy, Bill.

Thanks for your thoughtful and full critique.
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Old 10-23-2012, 08:49 PM
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chu-check it, Nick is spittin' Bukows' and it flows... Ohhhh!!!
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I'm afraid I've never heard of Bukowski. But I read it through to the end anyway. Loved the "you, dear reader" part.
It's like breaking the fourth wall; when it's subtle, it's genius.
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@JazZ:
breaking the fourth wall...


A new dimension of forum-lingo. Cool to see pencil pushers like you around here. Keep coming back! Learned something new from you twice in a row.
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Old 10-26-2012, 02:46 AM
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Originally Posted by JazZ View Post
I'm afraid I've never heard of Bukowski.
google "Bluebird poem, Bukowski"

life's not all kangaroos and camels, mate

and welcome to the play ground
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Old 10-26-2012, 02:51 AM
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Stop . Drop everything. Google it now.

Or

save yourselves and ruuuuun
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Old 10-26-2012, 03:15 AM
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Originally Posted by maidahl View Post
Stop . Drop everything. Google it now.

Or

save yourselves and ruuuuun
It wouldn't hurt you to read Bluebird, young missy.

And then go to the "F" in the comments and read 'fede'.

But you won't do any of this. You will flippantly flit about. And there is nothing wrong with that. "Do as thou wilt shall be the whole of the law"- boy, did that guy see it as it is.

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Well, I have no wise words or insights. I just really enjoyed this and completely identified with the concept.

Cheers.
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Originally Posted by Nick Pierce View Post
"Do as thou wilt shall be the whole of the law"

That's Aleister Crowley.
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Originally Posted by JohnConstantine View Post
That's Aleister Crowley.
And shall I know that you recognize the current photo avatar, Mr. Constantine?
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You'll have to school me on that one.
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Originally Posted by JohnConstantine View Post
You'll have to school me on that one.
A. C.
Ceylon (they call it Sri Lanka now) 1901.
He had gone there to study Buddhism.

Looks a handsome devil with the hair and beard, eh?
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Ah right, I did think it might be but didn't recognise him with the beard. Never seen him with one.

Yeah, well, you can get about and study all sorts of exotic philosophy in mysterious settings when you've got the cash... he ended up a rather lonely heroin addict... not sure if that's quite Nirvana.
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Originally Posted by JohnConstantine View Post
study all sorts of exotic philosophy in mysterious settings
Ah, and here you have what I am doing here.
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You will flippantly flit about. And there is nothing wrong with that. "Do as thou wilt shall be the whole of the law"- boy, did that guy see it as it is.

That quote hurts my heart. So relevant.

But your words hurt more. So relevant. Personally relevant.

Inspired an edit to a song that just changed without a word/inkling of the former song. Darn. or Yay!
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Originally Posted by maidahl View Post
You will flippantly flit about. And there is nothing wrong with that.

But your words hurt. So relevant. Personally relevant.
And yet Bukowski's Bluebird remains an unknown quantity in your environment.

Just sayin'...
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You're always just sayin'.

Ever try to kill anyone?

Like this mthrfcker:
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Originally Posted by maidahl View Post

Ever kill anyone?


With every exhalation the who I was is demised

With each inspiration I am born.
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Originally Posted by Nick Pierce View Post
With every exhalation the who I was is demised

With each inspiration I am born.


Nice one, Nick.

Thank you, Mr. Pierce.
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