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Old 09-16-2017, 04:45 PM
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I cannot presume to depart from my love,
As if—as if—once he could perish—
During the leave, and I—tardily away
Could encounter the soul that sought me

Should I regret—in the eyes—
Those eyes—a smile that hunted me—
The eyes that could not bear to shut—
Until they saw thru me,—saw thru me—

Can I suffer the self possession,—
So knowing I’d come—so knowing!
Him—awake, shadows and awake,—
Repeating my patient nickname—

My spirit could give, it’s broke again—
Since giving then—since giving up then—
Was useless as the sunrise, like pastels—
Where dewdrops had not yet been strewn!

Afterhand, composure desired nothing—
So assured, so even in dying—dead.
Because he was my friend, my heart!
It gave up on him as he was lying still.—

Keeping love in my heart,—keeping it—
Me and the dying, all there but dead,—
If he was not too loving—so loving—
I’d have had him with me evermore!

So sorry, to my friend, my love gains—
The lifeless garden groves, they go—
If he was not so careless—so lovely—
He’d have waited for me secretly!!

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Old 10-15-2017, 09:30 AM
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I really enjoyed your work.

The dashes, if read right, can really add a lot of emotional overtones that wouldn't be felt in a normal poem.

I really liked it.
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finally, someone admits to liking my hyphens... thanks for reading. i don't particularly think this was my best work though. come ADD as friends. i just added you...
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("...you can do no wrong, I never miss a poem you do..." smiled the goblin at the poetess, adding "...you've changed, you're poems have matured or become more focused then..." in fact, the goblin readily adapted to the hyphens, saying "...the reader learns to read as the work progresses, I don't think I thought much about it when I finished hamlet...")
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aww, thanks goblin! glad someone gets used to my hyphen-loves!
thanks for reading, guys...<3
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