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Old 05-27-2012, 02:51 PM
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This section appears to be long dead, but I'm learning from it regardless. I wanted to post this cinquain.

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Washed onto shores
Contain little notes for
Help sought that may or may not come
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I like the idea of the poem, but maybe you could take that idea and strip it from the message in the bottle cliche
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I like the poem but as someone else said the message in a bottle is cliche'. trust me I am the queen of cliche' most times with out knowing it. That is one of the reasons I am here for help.
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