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Old 07-15-2012, 09:44 PM
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The word does blaze and die
When uttered, some imply.
But I remain in knowing
That upon its utterance, it joins the living
In both beauty
And profanity.

The word is caused, not begotten
And though it may be forgotten,
It is all a ceremony of belief, immortality,
Affinity to poetry and beauty.

The word is composed in the now
So in the future, we may know
Them to be everlasting
And continually knocking
Nature into nature
And truth in caricature.

The word is a somebody
The dwells in possibility.

But Iím a nobody until
I speak and raise the anvil.

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Old 07-16-2012, 01:30 PM
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Yes, once them damn words are released there's no getting the little blighters back. Someone will brood on something you said, sometimes for months, before getting pissed (as in drunk) and giving you a right old bollocking.
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Old 07-16-2012, 02:36 PM
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This is a cool poem. I love how the first two stanzas sound... prophetic or something. I don't know if that makes sense, there's a tone to it, the old words and phrasing (begotten, does blaze and die, etc), just sounds vaguely Old Testament in a nonreligious way. This is a compliment, mind you; I'm saying that you wrote it powerfully. My only suggestion for this poem is to somehow bring that power all the way through, as the second part started to sound less prophetic and more "contemporary". Not that it's bad, though. On their own merits, the last 3 stanzas are great. But if you bring the power through, they'd be better.
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The word is a somebody
The dwells in possibility
Nice.
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