This is a cool poem. I love how the first two stanzas sound... prophetic or something. I don't know if that makes sense, there's a tone to it, the old words and phrasing (begotten, does blaze and die, etc), just sounds vaguely Old Testament in a nonreligious way. This is a compliment, mind you; I'm saying that you wrote it powerfully. My only suggestion for this poem is to somehow bring that power all the way through, as the second part started to sound less prophetic and more "contemporary". Not that it's bad, though. On their own merits, the last 3 stanzas are great. But if you bring the power through, they'd be better.
I saw no God, nor heard any, in a finite organical perception; but my senses discover'd the infinite in every thing ... I cared not for consequences but wrote." ~William Blake
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