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Old 04-21-2012, 03:58 AM
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They were crowding the doorway.
Mistake.

Headsize stone block construction.
Opening not quite two man wide.

One of them angles right side forward with a spear thrust as the other broad face struggles through beside him.
Doesn't have his sword out- needs to get beyond the archway first.

I center step towards them with a backhanded Ground to Sky cut.
(Just had this Scimitar sharpened- need to steer clear of brick and steel)

Slice through the pike man's left wrist, nick the wood pole shaft and gash the right inside forearm to the bone.

Glittering red sprinkles the air as my right hand turns clockwise.

Heaven to Hell cut.

Mister Number Two splits open diagonal from collarbone to hip.
His hand is still on his hilt.
Very still.

I step aside as the spurtin' pair pass by.

A few days behind on rent and they send goons to collect.

Man, times are sure gettin' hard.

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I liked it as an outline of sorts for what could be written.
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Nice one...One of them perspectives right part ahead with a spear pushed as the other wide experience battles through beside him.

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Nice one...One of them perspectives right part ahead with a spear pushed as the other wide experience battles through beside him.

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Intriguing nomenclature y'all elected to employ.
I'm ready to read some of your stuff.
Where's it at?
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Ew, Nick, that's worse than the zombie games I'm addicted too. Though I think this may get addictive too!
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Ew, Nick, that's worse than the zombie games I'm addicted too. Though I think this may get addictive too!
Life ain't always ginger snap cookies and warm milk, eh?
The useful thing, I think, is to cultivate an engaging outlook.

I believe this bit of doggerel embraces both of those aspects.
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They were crowding the doorway.
Mistake.

Headsize stone block construction.
Opening not quite two man wide.

One of them angles right side forward with a spear thrust as the other broad face struggles through beside him.
Doesn't have his sword out- needs to get beyond the archway first.

I center step towards them with a backhanded Ground to Sky cut.
(Just had this Scimitar sharpened- need to steer clear of brick and steel)

Slice through the pike man's left wrist, nick the wood pole shaft and gash the right inside forearm to the bone.

Glittering red sprinkles the air as my right hand turns clockwise.

Heaven to Hell cut.

Mister Number Two splits open diagonal from collarbone to hip.
His hand is still on his hilt.
Very still.

I step aside as the spurtin' pair pass by.

A few days behind on rent and they send goons to collect.

Man, times are sure gettin' hard.



I fookin' love this piece.

Is it set in Syria before Egypt invaded it?
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Is it set in Syria before Egypt invaded it?

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That would make the time frame before 3000 BC?
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Then you're clearly no spring chicken.
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Then you're clearly no spring chicken.

I didn't invent dirt but I did find it mighty convenient when it came along.
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That would make the time frame before 3000 BC?
And yer rent's still late...
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why dont u ever write stories? this one's very detailed. i love all your details. they're so assured or something...
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Originally Posted by Prodigalson View Post
And yer rent's still late...
You can take my burro
You can have my donkey
But, and mark my words, my ass is mine
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why dont u ever write stories? this one's very detailed. i love all your details. they're so assured or something...

I did write a complete (thin) story.

It is titled The Righteous Ride of Gallopin' Gallo.

Some of the chapters are posted on this site.
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i found it. i remembered it and i already commented it as maidahl....
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i found it. i remembered it and i already commented it as maidahl....
Never posted the entire piece.
You have seen some of it.
Gallo been askin' me to get it all together.
Guess I best find the pertinent scribbles in the drawer fulla patter paper and put them up.

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you hand write?
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you hand write?
Yep.

When I say I scribble I mean I scribble.
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