Originally Posted by Rhein13
It's tough sometimes when you only get a snippet. It's tough to truly know each character and their motives so thats why I pointed it out just incase.
I miss obvious things all the time! But that usually has to do with a girls vagueness when they try to subtly suggest they're into me, lol.
Comment 14 tells you this is part of a larger story. Gallo has made his way across these pages during other posts.
As you progress with the pen you will eschew such dumbed down expressions as lol
I suggest you get a copy of Strunk and White then carefully read the section regarding slang.
And while we are waiting for that happen, Christ in a bikini, you're a writer - can't you be original when you tell us how you laugh?