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Old 11-11-2010, 06:25 AM
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Night Vision

Can you see into the dark
Do you know the way it moves
Sinewy spirals curling
Through circles
Elegant and smooth.

Would you step into the dark
If your candle guttered
When all around the unknown lies
Watching you with hidden eyes.

Can you smell me in the dark
Sense me there beside you
Does your breathing quicken
And fear grip at your heart?
Or are you as you ever were:
With every urge
To run
Yet rooted there by pride;
One further step inside.

Fear, like steam, evaporates
As face-to-face we stand
You sense me but see nothing
I reach but cannot touch

Dont ever fear the dark
Dont leave me for the light;
Know me here, and love me
In my eternal night.

MGW 2008

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Old 11-11-2010, 06:36 AM
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Oooooo, a poet's plea for acceptance. I like it, really like it...done a few myself (increased the alienation, actually). ;-)
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Old 11-11-2010, 06:49 AM
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Sh!t. Is that what it was?

Ooooh. You've gone all Freudian on me now. I was thinking dead wife, husband remains - separated by death...that sort of thing.

Oh gods, was that seriously about my inner psyche?

I need a drink...
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Old 11-11-2010, 06:57 AM
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Yeah, that was the 'transparent' interpretation I had as well. Perhaps I was looking for a consort of such malaise. Yes, my Freudian slip is showing. ;-)
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Old 11-11-2010, 06:57 AM
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Lol, I was thinking more along the lines of your intentions Kasubi. Lovers parted by death, longing, missing, afraid and yet not.

Very beautiful, and in a strage way, I found the last three stanza's quite... steamy. I enjoyed this, very much.
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Old 11-11-2010, 03:47 PM
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Fegger - you look too deep my friend. I'm really a simple f*er at heart

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