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Old 02-27-2016, 02:15 AM
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I am not sure what to do with my main character, to give him a personal goal or some sort of character drive for the first half of my story. Mainly he is a cop assigned to catch a gang, along with other cops assigned to it, but I am not sure what to do to make him more interesting than just a cop on a job.

The story is about a gang of serial rapist/killer type villains and the reason why they are that way, is that they were social and educational misfits while growing up, being bullied and persecuted for being 'inferior'. They becomes lonely, especially yearning for the opposite sex as they get older, and this turns them into what they are, and they target women that are the type to reject them because of it.

Since they are social misfits they also target men who mistreats their type out of revenge as well.

The cop investigating the case, is also raped by one of the gang members, and vows revenge on the gang, after the one gets away with raping him.

But the cop is not raped until half way through the story about. So his driving goal (the revenge), is not part of his character until half way through.

I was wondering if there is anything I can do to give him a goal or some sort of drive, before that for the story. Cause he is a cop given an assignment to catch this gang, but I feel that maybe I should make him more than just a cop on an assignment.

Some sort of extra character developmental stakes in the matter, or something to make him interesting to the reader for the first half. What do you think?


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Old 02-27-2016, 02:49 AM
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Why not instead of him getting violated, have it happen to his (close) sister or to his wife? From the get-go. Something that's been kept hush-hush. That way, he'll have his drive to go after these guys and nail them. Maybe?
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Old 02-27-2016, 06:26 AM
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Or, just make him a real person. The only reason a character would read as boring is if the writer doesn't see said character as a person, but as a cut-out plot device. You're writing about people, so make your characters people
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I guess I don't want to make the victim, the cop's sister or wife, cause I feel it's been done many times before, and I wanted to make him the victim. I also thought the reader would connect more compellingly to him being the victim himself, even more so than a loved one.

I can make him a real person, that's no problem. I just feel that he is a bit of a plain jane good guy, till his victimization. I feel that the villains and supporting characters, have bigger flaws and bigger goals, that will overshadow the MC in comparison.
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Or, just make him a real person. The only reason a character would read as boring is if the writer doesn't see said character as a person, but as a cut-out plot device. You're writing about people, so make your characters people
I second what CandraH said. You're writing people, not characters. You have to give them time to maturate organically.
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Revenge would be a pretty good thing for him to seek out justice or even go all vigilante on the asses of the gang that raped him. Saw something similar at the Shield with David Aceveda who was forced to give fellatio to a crimminal at gunpoint. He had to jump through hoops eventually loosing his morals due to that rape.
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Make a connection between a gang member and the cop. Perhaps they were friends in school or lived in the same building. You can have someone the cop knows be attacked by the gang or hurt in their escape. Perhaps the cop is trying to prove their worth to their superior or someone else they know. Hope this helps.
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Maybe the plain white-breadedness of the cop prior to the rape is something you want to emphasize, so the rape seems even more of an affront.
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I was thinking similar to Prodigal - prior to getting raped, the detective is a more empathetic character.

You could even give the detective a little backstory - he was a nerd who then was a late bloomer, grew physically and mentally imposing but still had some nerd sympathies and nerd tendencies.
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Well considering what your MC is going to be going through I recommend a ball gag and a box of medicated tissues.

Are you attempting to write gay porn? If so you could spruce him up by having him work as a drag queen on Saturday nights. One of the other drag queens spikes his water bottle and then rapes him. It's a mystery that isn't solved until the last chapter.

Hope this helps.
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Most cops investigating sex crimes aren't victims, and they do a fine job - professional and effective, but perhaps not very empathetic, either due to personality or as a defense mechanism (you can't be TOO empathetic, or you can't really do the job).

I think about a fantastic movie, LA Confidential, where the main character has a real "thing" for protecting women - but it's possibly the one thing that never really plays out very strongly in the story. So, maybe just have your cop be a cop - a good cop - who has this empathetic epiphany forced on him by his own rape. That might be very, very real for your readers who have NOT been sexually assaulted.

Thanks, and best of luck.
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