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Old 09-13-2018, 12:35 PM
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Default Ode to an English Feast


Companions, circle in for English-feasts
We shark-chew till skeleton bellies are famished.
Swallow pork and pot-belly chicken

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Maybe gnash instead of shark-chew.
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Maybe gnash instead of shark-chew.
Ok! Then I change that. Thanks Brian.
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D'you think writing Aphrodite exhausted your supply of words?

You've barely squeezed out three lines per poem since
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D'you think writing Aphrodite exhausted your supply of words?

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I don't know whether that was a compliment or an insult. Come again?
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I don't know whether that was a compliment or an insult. Come again?


If Grace gave it (unprovoked), it was not an insult. At worst case a joke, meant for you to laugh along with. Had you given her reason to attack you there wouldn’t be doubt as to the situation. She isn’t sneaky about such things, like I or a few others might be from time to time.
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I don't know whether that was a compliment or an insult. Come again?
Just a playful comment Yonathan...took me days to savour and digest your impassioned opus magnus...just wondered if the current crop of haiku was because you'd knackered yourself....

And BP's assessment is fair - I'll either come at you with the unbridled affection of a puppy or mow you down with the subtlety of a juggernaut...and this verse was allright but a bit like a dry crust after the sumptuous banquet of Aphrodite.
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Originally Posted by Grace Gabriel View Post
Just a playful comment Yonathan...took me days to savour and digest your impassioned opus magnus...just wondered if the current crop of haiku was because you'd knackered yourself....

And BP's assessment is fair - I'll either come at you with the unbridled affection of a puppy or mow you down with the subtlety of a juggernaut...and this verse was allright but a bit like a dry crust after the sumptuous banquet of Aphrodite.
Ah ok! Thanks for the heads up! Didn't know how to react to that.
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