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Old 04-06-2017, 06:54 PM
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Mother's birthday
and it was pouring rain.
I dashed about the puddles,
bouquet and gift-wrap in hand.

Barefoot and bored I sat behind the desk
typing the employee safety checklist.
The personal phone buzzes,
"You'll never do better than me."

I filed and filed and filed that shit away,
put my ego through the shredder.
I suppressed those foul emotions
like a nasty fart, deep within me.

Driving home on the interstate,
raining harder than ever,
traffic grinding to a halt;
an SUV flipped over, obliterated.

When I arrived at mother's
the Sun came out and we drank coffee,
exchanged kisses and gifts and hand-written cards.
Afterward, I went home and ate a wonderful roast.

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Old 04-08-2017, 02:30 PM
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I've always liked your poems Luvknife.

Only thing I couldn't understand was why you were "exchanging gifts" when it was your Mother's birthday - suggests you were equally receiving in return?
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Old 04-08-2017, 07:53 PM
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I just assumed they shared a birthday. It added a subtle pleasant feeling to the whole thing.
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Old 04-09-2017, 01:26 AM
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That's true BP. Didn't even think of it.
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