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Pain of pressure and expectation
Elation of freedom and acceptance
The darkness holds me to its breast
Your breath gives me all liberation

The filth of dirt clings to my skin
Motes pierce clarity and sight
Lusting flesh froths at the mouth
A howl and feral cry to heaven

Ease of breath and gentle kiss
Pain holding back submission
Railing against freely given grace
Gentle touch that releases pain

Warm glow that soothes and heals
Fresh wind that brings belonging
Flowing waters of endless life
Precious eternal light of love

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Pain of pressure and expectation
Elation of freedom and acceptance
The darkness holds me to its breast
Your breath gives me all liberation

The filth of dirt clings to my skin
Motes pierce clarity and sight
Lusting flesh froths at the mouth
A howl and feral cry to heaven

Ease of breath and gentle kiss
Pain holding back submission
Railing against freely given grace
Gentle touch that releases pain

Warm glow that soothes and heals
Fresh wind that brings belonging
Flowing waters of endless life
Precious eternal light of love

Very polite generic statements.
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Old 03-22-2017, 08:06 AM
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If you'll notice the first four lines are a mixture of positive and negative: Negative, Positive, Negative, Positive. So in essence a rising from negativity into positive thought.

The second grouping is pure negative. As in a falling back into old ways that only harmed.

The third grouping is again a mixture of positive and negative: Positive, negative, negative, positive. This grouping is about a rebirth of hope - rising out of the darkness again and into the light. But with every rise comes a struggle. Unlike the previous mixture of positive and negative, this mixture starts with a positive, sandwiches two negatives, and ends with a positive.

The final grouping ends in only positive - indicating that the finality of the emotional story is eternally good.

So this, while generic in appearance, has subtle tones to it of a story of sorts. A journey that people go through (although all not with the same results).
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If you'll notice the first four lines are a mixture of positive and negative: Negative, Positive, Negative, Positive. So in essence a rising from negativity into positive thought.

The second grouping is pure negative. As in a falling back into old ways that only harmed.

The third grouping is again a mixture of positive and negative: Positive, negative, negative, positive. This grouping is about a rebirth of hope - rising out of the darkness again and into the light. But with every rise comes a struggle. Unlike the previous mixture of positive and negative, this mixture starts with a positive, sandwiches two negatives, and ends with a positive.

The final grouping ends in only positive - indicating that the finality of the emotional story is eternally good.

So this, while generic in appearance, has subtle tones to it of a story of sorts. A journey that people go through (although all not with the same results).

Okay. I see. You intend the piece to come across as a well written human interest newspaper story.

It works quite well in that light.
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Exactly! You get me.
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