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Old 07-09-2011, 04:41 AM
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I see some of the heavy hitters have returned to the page
I'm beginning to grasp how accomplished their writing is

They show me how things are for them
I tell myself to put up a poem

Later, looking at it, I see it sucks
Then I take it down

I haven't gotten any more sophisticated at composition
But I am starting to see how truly primitive I am

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Old 07-09-2011, 04:50 AM
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Nah. Not buying!
Intelligence and talent gift-wrapped in rough 'n' ready wrap.
You're too smart to really think you're primitive.
I'm too smart to believe you.....
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Old 07-10-2011, 06:42 AM
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Keep on writing! Your stuff is fun to read.
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Originally Posted by Nick Pierce View Post
I see some of the heavy hitters have returned to the page
I'm beginning to grasp how accomplished their writing is

They show me how things are for them
I tell myself to put up a poem

Later, looking at it, I see it sucks
Then I take it down

I haven't gotten any more sophisticated at composition
But I am starting to see how truly primitive I am



Hanging my head here, Pierce.


Steady on, Nick.
Early days.
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Kinda makes you wonder what we were thinking at the time. Actually let me ask. What were you thinking when you wrote it? Ive been seeing a lot of your older stuff and while I know what you think of it now what was the idea at the time?

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Old 03-19-2017, 04:09 AM
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Kinda makes you wonder what we were thinking at the time. Actually let me ask. What were you thinking when you wrote it? Ive been seeing a lot of your older stuff and while I know what you think of it now what was the idea at the time?
It (my feeling/idea) was as it is stated in the poem.
Don't recall what I posted and removed.
Do recall there were some sterling representations of wordcraft being put to the page by various members.

Some of them marks were set quite high for the tyke who types here.

Gaines, Waterpoor, and many others were wailin' at a good clip half a dozen years ago.

But I ain't really waxin' nostalgic with all this stuff.
Simply populatin' some forums while the Beat has a chance to repopulate itself.


That bein' said I never know if anything is gonna come up when I click the address these days.

Kinda suspenseful, huh?
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at least it's not about poopoo. nice, might be a practiced tone to it? other than that, nick, you're really going nowhere. it's very much like you're just venting. kind of a weird mood. i wonder if i could get away with it.

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Old 03-20-2017, 02:24 AM
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