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Old 12-19-2017, 07:24 AM
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Here's another set of lyrics and a song...

I Am Happy (With Myself)

There is a picture that I keep --
you’re on the floor and fast asleep.
You were smiling at the time;
you only had your heels on and a button-down of mine

You went with me to see that show,
although I knew you really didn’t want to go.
You took satisfaction from the fact,
that the actors couldn’t sing, and the singers couldn’t act.

Chorus:

Then we went walking, alone, down by the river;
When you took my hand, girl, I felt you shiver.
And you had on your sunshine yellow dress,
When I said I didn’t love yet-- I lied, I must confess.

You said, “Now boy, no smoking in my car.
Why don’t you throw out that strange cigar?
Roll the window down instead,
but put my daddy's jacket on -- and your hat back on your head.”

Chorus:

There is a lady who was a star;
now she’s livin’ out of her Cadillac car
She’ll tell your fortune, down at the fair --
everyone knows who she is--but no one really cares.

There was a fellow on the news,
his mother said he had the blues.
He stood on a ledge for half a day,
then he took his shoes and socks off and he tried to fly away.

Chorus:

And here's the song:

https://drive.google.com/open?id=16g...rY06Y3EVY17Jsv


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I like the guitar Myers, affective. Nice one.
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Glad it worked for you and thanks for listening, kev.
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Like it too, thanks for sharing
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Thanks, Leila.

Cheers.
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("...talented indeed..." went the goblin)
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Cheers. Thanks for listening.
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simplistic and puerile
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Old 12-24-2017, 08:39 PM
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Thanks! Coming from you that means a lot.
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Old 12-25-2017, 03:56 AM
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it was my pleasure and good luck with your garage band and if you make to the big time do yourself a favor and pull a Kobain..you can do it!
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Old 12-25-2017, 04:23 AM
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I was thinking plane crash or maybe choking on my own vomit -- but that could work.

In the meantime, do you want to be a roadie? No taste or intelligence is required -- and you might even get laid!
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A plane crash? No way. I think you will become the opening act for the next Elton John concert tour. You'll choke to death in his dressing room.
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Oh, and about the roadie thing and getting laid -- try not to get your hopes up.

Apparently, even syphilitic groupies have standards.
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You didn't. Musically or otherwise.
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I see you're a devoted follower of the "I know you are but what am I" school of repartee.

Good job!
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Leaving your garage door open is not the same as being on tour. And does your sheet music come with a refrigerator magnet? It should. Pull one off your forehead and send it along.
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Let me explain something to you about humor.

You see, with my plane crash response, I’m employing something called self-deprecating humor. Essentially, I’m defusing your attempt to use humor (or your version of it) to insult me. (Of course, it also helps that I’m not insulted in any way.)

I’m clearly not trying defend my music -- mainly because I don’t have to. At the same time, I’m acknowledging and agreeing that there is no likelihood that I will achieve Cobain-like status. Additionally, I'm implying that your assumption that I have any grandiose ideas about my music isn't very smart.

You keep making the same fundamental error -- this is also why your garage door joke falls flat. And these days, lots of guys who have no aspirations beyond having fun play music in their garages. So the joke is dated and fails on the level too. (I won’t address the Elton John blowjob joke or the refrigerator magnet joke, because those are just plain stupid.)

Are you with me so far? If not, here’s a simple illustration:

An overweight comedian is making jokes about his weight. (Again, self-deprecating humor.)

And then some drunk idiot in the crowd heckles him with, “Hey, you’re fat!”

See how that's not funny or clever?

And finally, just to clarify -- that idiot is you.

Hope that helps, as they say.

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Simplistic and puerile. At least your consistent and boring as hell.
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No, it’s not simplistic and puerile in the least. Boring, maybe, if you have a short attention span, but otherwise, it’s 100% accurate.

But maybe next time I’ll just make it clear you’re an idiot from the get-go – and I’ll save us both some time.

Cheers.

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You don't have enough talent to be thought of as mediocre.

Simplistic and puerile as always.
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Originally Posted by Gaines View Post
You don't have enough talent to be thought of as mediocre.

Simplistic and puerile as always.


Maybe you could give some specific examples of Myers ďnon-talent.Ē

This seems disingenuous. You donít know anything about music, do you?

I mean, beyond: ďI know what I like.Ē

I finally got to hear this song.

So, the guitars are fantastic. Iím not a fan of the drum machine. I just donít think it compares to a good live drummer. And in the past youíve played and recorded with a real drummer so that wall has been bridged.

Your bass playing continues to progress, and youíve stopped playing it like a guitar player.😀

Is this song supposed to be a duet? Maybe Iím off, but it seems like maybe it was written with that in mind.

Anyway, I liked it.

I think you should re-record with the drummer.


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Okay BP since you had the mind to ask. The lyrics are juvenile. The ham fisted techno drumming is a bit over the top giving off too much noise and not enough cohesive beat to the sound. This is what I hear. Others hear what they wish to.

I play piano and guitar and over the years I have sat in with a few local bands but those days are now over. I have dabbled in rock and country music and a smattering of bluegrass along with classical. It's a matter of taste but I am sure he felt I was picking on him for his insolent attitude on a previous thread.

What I originally offered was an honest crit of the song knowing full well it would be received with smart ass. I was not disappointed. So being the caustic wad I am I returned the favor with malice of thought.

There are some that can take a crit of their work and some that can't. The ones that can't always take the bait.

Now I am completely bored with this thread.
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Your first critique was: simple and puerile. If thatís not trolling, I donít know what is. Wait... I DO know what that is.

Anyway, you can not like something. Thatís fine. But when you paint yourself into a corner with obvious trolling youíre gonna get spanked.

I was also not a fan of the drum machine, but to call them techno is just silly. They were not nuanced enough for me based on some previous recordings Iíd heard from Myers, but they were miles from techno. It just makes you sound like a ding-ding to someone who knows better.

Iím sure youíre not bored with this thread.




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BP -- thanks for listening.

Yeah -- the intention is always to record real drums. The logistics are challenging. Basically, when I get a group of songs together, I'll try to get someone to commit to coming in and recording them.

And yeah -- been working on the bass -- so I'm glad that's working better for you. Just today I got some flat wound strings in my stocking -- that should help!

As for Gaines -- holy shit -- could you even try to make a bigger fool of yourself?

Honest critique? Techno?

What a moron.
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Flat wound keeps the fingers from getting shredded. Thereís a certain physicality to the bass that you donít have with a guitar.

Miles Davis was said to have known when Chambers had taken the weekend off of the bass by just listening to him play.




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Yeah -- and I'm not really digging the sound of the round wound strings -- especially sliding on the higher notes...
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Yeah -- and I'm not really digging the sound of the round wound strings -- especially sliding on the higher notes...


They blend better with a mix. Theyíre less dynamic. They sort of focus the bass sound.

Try recording them with guitars before you give them up.


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I've been using round wound strings.

I don't really like what's called "fret noise" on acoustic guitar -- although it's really the sound of your fingers moving over the wound strings.

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As usual, great job Myers.

Really like the switch to muffled voicings at about 1:25 and 2:28 - how do you get that effect by the way? Never mind - probably just a filter or something.

Can't say I noticed it was drummed by a machine (I'm not that savvy), but I can say the drumming was pretty damn well put together. Guitars are great as always. Didn't like the note it faded out on (wasn't the refrain?), but the kind of wordless-fluctuating-flow of vocals near the end was awesome.

Once again I have to say: you really know how to put a song together, bringing different elements into cohesion, and an ear for inserting novel complementary flair.
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Hey, thanks man.

The drums are actually sampled. That means each drum hit is a recording of someone hitting a drum, cymbal, etc. You put down the track by hitting the notes/beats on your keyboard.

You can spend a lot of time varying how loud/hard each hit is to make it sound more human. If you spend enough time, it can be pretty convincing.

I just got new drum software that has twice the samples for each drum/cymbal -- and a lot more control over all the variables that make drums sound natural, even simulation for mic placement, but I haven't had a chance to play with it.

The drums on this track are a bit obtrusive -- and I probably called more attention to them with the intro -- and there are probably too many fills.

I experimented with ways to get that distorted overdriven vocal -- there are various ways to do do it, but I actually ran the vocal through a guitar distortion pedal.

The end is the first three chords of the guitar solo/bridge -- but I don't go back to the root key -- so it sort of has the effect of changing keys -- that might be a bit disconcerting, but I was going for something random and contrasting at the end.

Anyway -- I appreciate the listen.

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