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Old 12-07-2017, 06:50 PM
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I have a sky-blue rabbit hat… it was a gift, and when it rains
The wet stays out, and the universe proceeds to unravel it's green carpet --

The furry Trilby has pinned the creation
Of a navy-rose dangling for strangers.

Never to wilt, the flower is fake, but the material
Impervious to the dreaming shadows after my heart.

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I like the first two lines (nice way of seeing), Couldn't get into the rest , except the imagery I got from....( shadows after my heart ) Thanks for the read,Bee. Maybe a bit too subjective. Perhaps someone come along and says it's the Bee's knees. I don't know, but it;s interesting how we can all look at a poem and see different aspects that mean more to us than another.

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Thanks for your honest reaction. It was a stretch in writing about a gift. I think perhaps the story behind the hat, within the poem doesn't exist. yet, a triple story is hidden,er, not yet writ.
more imagery i guess is in order.
rabbits can have quite a metaphor, lucky as their feet are. much to meander. gracias.
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