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The Picture of Funnybone Jack

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Old 07-13-2018, 11:41 AM
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Default The Picture of Funnybone Jack

Roll your funny-ribs down a hill
Funnybone Jack
It goes clunk, clunk, clunk.

You’re skull is a jack-in-the-box
contraption for tickles and tickles
Clunk, clunk, clunk, down sharp
avocado green hill curving high
and low.

You’re funny-bone is your head
Off with that skull of yours.

Clunk, Clunk, clunk,
You’re slipping from a slanting

Which glides by blonde wigheads and
noose-like flesh
Why did your noggin go down the hill?

Clunk, clunk, clunk
The dream soda-fizzled.

And a thump, thump thump
“Mom I think the dream was real.”
you said.

“I felt the ceiling hit me.”

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Old 07-29-2018, 07:07 AM
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I like this. It's fun! And overall, it conveys a feeling. I don't know if I get a solid meaning, but I do get a solid feeling, and I just like it. Well done!
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