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Old 09-16-2018, 05:55 AM
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I've been reading a lot about Tanka poetry. I've gone through lot of stuff on internet and have tried to write some Tanka poems.

What do you think about these?


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In need of some sleep
She's now extremly tired
Of recurrent faces
Which find their way in her dreams
Mid-night, she sobs for her past.

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That lonely bench
In the middle of night, pined
For one who was young
The boy who departed early
Once sat on the bench and cried.

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Old 09-19-2018, 11:14 PM
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They are interesting to read.
Well thought out.

Is there no titles to tankas?
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Old 09-21-2018, 02:01 AM
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Yeah, thanks
I thought for the first one it would be "Tired" and for the second it could be "Lonely Bench"
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is it supposed to connect?
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Old 09-28-2018, 07:40 PM
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These feel similar to each other.
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