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Old 10-13-2018, 09:44 AM
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Hi, I tried to place this in the adult section, but was blocked..

Sandy was randy,
Her roommate Estelle new well how to please her,
She would not defer from her goal, or her role
as naughty nurse Estelle, and this role she would sell
like Daniel Day Lewis, who is not involved in this poem for legal reasons.

Sandy was the patient, yet impatient due to Chinspinner's obfuscation,
and the relaxation he displayed when he should have been writing the next scene. I mean, by now her nurse Randy, or whatever, should have been tits out, acting like she was in in an amateur play. Yet she knew not what to say. She glanced nervously at the camera.

"do we get it on now?" asked Stella or whatever.

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If Sandy was Randy, she was already confused.

She could have had self sex and been demused.


But in the reading of your work

Vince would be a shalow Jerk

and would probably wear a smirk
if he failed to listen and not lurk


So I like the freeness and the way it caught
and held my mind's eye and hence my thought
and wonder sencerly what it was Estelle broght

so confused am I too
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It was intended to be miserable Vince
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Indeed, but I still worry about Randy who was Sandy
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Indeed, but I still worry about Randy who was Sandy
Dunno, kinda churned it out, didn't like it, posted it, don't really wanna revisit it.
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Old 10-13-2018, 12:01 PM
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Ok, was just playing
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Chin this is unexpected where is the bloke in all this??
I mean it is action packed but it is lacking the guy
No?
haha
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Old 10-13-2018, 12:20 PM
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Chin this is unexpected where is the bloke in all this??
I mean it is action packed but it is lacking the guy
No?
haha
Honestly Nacia, I am the POV in this. I do not like it. It made me want a shower.
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Old 10-13-2018, 12:27 PM
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Originally Posted by Chinspinner View Post
Honestly Nacia, I am the POV in this. I do not like it. It made me want a shower.


Say, not to interrupt here, but in the Jack and Cacian story I assigned Jack an occupation but it feels wrong. I think Iíd prefer to use your actual occupation, chin, to make it more tailored.

So, what is your occupation?
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Say, not to interrupt here, but in the Jack and Cacian story I assigned Jack an occupation but it feels wrong. I think I’d prefer to use your actual occupation, chin, to make it more tailored.

So, what is your occupation?
haha, that sounds horribly contrived... explain further.

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Originally Posted by Chinspinner View Post
haha, that sounds horribly contrived... explain further.


Really? Hmm...

Jack (chin), and Cacian (Nacia), are going to have an entanglement. You could say relationship, but I hardly see that working. Still, itís a good story so far. I just think as much realism as possible will make the piece more enjoyable for both of you to read. Itíll also stop me from bleeding into the male character.

Clear enough?
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You donít have to name a firm or anything... I can make that up.
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I am a project manager- I build stuff
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My uncle was called Jack. My parents wanted to call me Jack, but he was a criminal, so they felt they could not. Shame, I like that name and he was a lovely guy.
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I am a project manager- I build stuff


OMG!

Thatís exactly the job I gave you. You fucking twat!

Alright, alright, one kiss, but no tongue.😘

Also, how do you feel about butt-plugs?
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haha, that came outta left field. Fine, insert whatever you need to.

EDIT: btw, I have given multiple hints as to my occupation, so do not pat your own back too hard.
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haha, that came outta left field. Fine, insert whatever you need to.

EDIT: btw, I have given multiple hints as to my occupation, so do not pat your own back too hard.


I picked construction because itís an occupation I know about, and can include details that are relevant. Donít be so vain as to assume I read all of your posts.
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Originally Posted by brianpatrick View Post
I picked construction because itís an occupation I know about, and can include details that are relevant. Donít be so vain as to assume I read all of your posts.
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Honestly Nacia, I am the POV in this. I do not like it. It made me want a shower.
I see you preside in your own porn LOL
Hollywood eat you heart out LOL
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I see you preside in your own porn LOL
Hollywood eat you heart out LOL
I just barked my shin.
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Originally Posted by Chinspinner View Post
My uncle was called Jack. My parents wanted to call me Jack, but he was a criminal, so they felt they could not. Shame, I like that name and he was a lovely guy.
Is that a play on the Jack the lad ??. Sorry I just had to say it no offence to your uncle.
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Is that a play on the Jack the lad ??. Sorry I just had to say no offence to your uncle.
haha no, he was a John.
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