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Old 02-03-2014, 01:10 PM
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...in older people, they say, because we're sorting through more memories
than people who are younger. Allow me to demonstrate.

America's first president, George...

.................................................. ....George...

.................................................. .............................you know, he crossed the Delaware.
.................................................. .............................Wooden teeth, he couldn't smile.
.................................................. .............................Something about a cherry tree.

George Truman!
Father of Our Country.
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A very different and rather odd topography used, but the spreading out serves it rather well. The more prose-like introduction serves the poem well, although I will admit that I don't really get the whole George Washington (which is implied) and George Truman (who I've never heard of, although I have heard of Harry Truman).

Maybe you'd have to know more of American stuff to really understand, but I thought that I'd just say how the transition from title to poem blending together was something you don't usually see, and that I thought it was rather well done.

I like the loss of some memory here though, even though I don't really get the names and all. So while I scratch my head and wonder, I tip my imaginary hat to you for using a more unusual, more unique topography than those you generally see.
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Hi, Error. This is just for fun, it's a hit on the other group I frequent. Taken from a study at TŁbingen University which made the statement about older people having more data to sort than younger people. I think you have to be raised American to get the remainder!

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Yeah, I guessed that American bit. But with the changing around of names, I thought that it could be an indication of age. Where knowledge slowly starts melting together. So I thought that "George Truman" may have been George Washington and Harry Truman sort of blending together in memory. Unable to sort the one from the other anymore.

But I really liked that whole merging of title and intro, and then the overall topography. Very nice work, I enjoyed reading it. Even if some of the stuff made no sense to my not-American mind.
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Just a joke about getting old...there is no "George Truman," the narrator is confused. The public enjoys light-hearted material!

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Originally Posted by LanceRocks View Post
Just a joke about getting old...there is no "George Truman," the narrator is confused. The public enjoys light-hearted material!

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Actually when I looked it up there was some guy called George Truman, I wanted to be sure. But he was no public figure, so I assumed that there was that confusion factor, wasn't sure it was a joke at the time, although I suspected, but glad I know that now for sure. Oh, how you old people make me laugh. Keep it up, Lance.
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