Originally Posted by iDrew
Could be an interesting concept but as a narrative poem it has yet to develop the tale.
So, four lines inconsistently punctuated in iambic pentameter with a ABAB rhyme scheme. Good start, however, the tale needs to be worth telling and the form maintained.
Perhaps a little restraint with your posting new threads. If you get bored with inactivity on the board; create some. Offer others the benefit of your wisdom, with the added bonus that critiquing is a very useful tool to understanding your own work from the inside out.
I suppose my lack of experience on this forum has left me vulnerable to such comments. I did not post this incomplete poem because of boredom due to inactivity, but rather was hoping for constructive criticism. When I posted this poem's beginning, I was aware that it was just that, a beginning. It was the very first poem I had written, or begun writing, in iambic pentameter. I am happy that you recognize it as such! Correct me if I'm wrong, but I was under the impression that this forum was an outlet for writers, or those interesting in writing, where they could receive constructive feedback on their work with the goal of self-improvement. I posted this with the hopes that someone may see something in it and be interested in offering assistance, or an interesting perspective on what I had written. Is this not the forum for that?
I have this folder on my desktop with writing that I've done in the past year. I never shared it with anyone. I never knew if any of it was any good or if anyone would find it interesting. I've had this itch to write since I was a little girl. I doubt it will amount to anything, but since I've belonged to this forum, which hasn't been very long, I've taken the plunge. I've been posting things I've written in the past year, just to see what people think. I'm sorry if my eagerness to learn and share has somehow conveyed that I am bored and needing to post random and incomplete works. Based on your response, I am wondering if this is the forum for me.
I do have one question, the answer to which may help me in my pursuits to improve my writing. You mention that my poem is inconsistently punctuated. Can you be specific as to how?