To be honest its not my favorite piece from you, but I still like it.
The punctuation is a little inconsistant, but the rhyming seems erratic and a little jumbled and seems to jump all oover the place. I prefer a steady, consistant scheme myself.
I think the repetition of "Dear Bombay" in the body of the poem is a little unnecessary and tiring, I'd suggest just using it at the beggining and end.
The constant use of "I" really irks me, theres ways around it and doing so can really liven up your piece.
I like the overall them, and I think that you could try and make this more of a letter style, because with the first line being selective to letters it seems to trail off in places like here:
As lives gets pilfered
relentless and remorseless
shrouded in familiar screams
Overall it was nice, but I've seen better from you