Hello, I am wondering if anyone can give me honest feedback on the first part of my script? 5 pages and I am hoping that I am heading towards the right direction.
Log line: A traditional animation feature length focusing on the survival, consequences and hardships two young siblings must endure after the death of their parents from a devastating tsunami.
You can access the PDF here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B32...it?usp=sharing
If anybody can point out certain sections I am going wrong regarding writing style, dialogue etc then it will be really helpful because it seems like I am still making novice mistakes and need more guidance.