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Old 06-05-2011, 02:53 AM
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Well to start i really like your layout and form etc because it seems really professional. i have quite a lot of experience acting in plays and stuff and this does definitely look like a script (i can confirm!).Also I am a big fan of the boy in the striped pyjamas, and this is quite different from the books/film, which i didn't like at first because, well, its different! But to be fair it is an adaptation, so i suppose there have to be differences and i do see why you made them. i also think you have some really nice monologues in there. However as a quick point I would say that some of the scenes might need a bit of very light tweaking to make them a bit plausible (for want of a better word) because they seem that little bit unnatural. However, with a bit of editing, I think this could be a very nice script.
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