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Old 01-26-2015, 09:28 AM
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It's pretty good. I just don't get the context of it all, and there are a few grammatical mistakes that can be smoothed over in a quick edit or so.

I don't know why, but I'm fascinated by the character of Will. Despite the fact that you barely gave any context or character build-up whatsoever, I found him quite interesting in the snippets of character that you showed. I mean, he had the character of a nice swindler: robbing you blind or stabbing your back while saying "Please", "Thank you", and closing your eyes after you die. Just biding his time until the old lady dies and he can get the fortune.

At least, that's what I saw. It's pretty good, as I've said before, and I only wish for some context or background to help me enjoy it more.
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