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Old 04-16-2014, 05:44 AM
angelgirl (Offline)
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Hi, your script isn't too bad. I suppose the fact that I could see it recounted in the movies makes it a good script. Weldone for keeping the dialogue flowing, and not distracting us with any extra motion details. I felt that your dialogue had my complete attention.

I like how you have two scenes taking place at the same time. One with the mobsters robbing the store, and the other detailing the conversation between the politician, and aspiring priest. However, I also enjoyed the part where he is looking back on how the events went down.

I'm not too clued up on script, and I know a lot of violence, swearing and insulting takes place in the movies too, so I think it fits the mould.
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