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Old 01-06-2015, 07:24 AM
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Very creepy concept. Just my opinion, but it seems like a very good modernization of Edgar Allan Poe's "The Raven". It has that atmosphere, the despair, and the sad and down ending you expect in a story like this. Overall, very good story, very well-made and paced, and just generally oozing with fear and horror.

I have one complaint, though: you did not establish the character's despair or madness in the story, so I have to rely on what the Narrator says to know what is feeling inside. Maybe a more solid introduction on the main character's inner demons would make it easier to understand his struggles so that you won't have to hold the reader/audience's hand too much.

Still good, though, and I enjoyed it a lot more than I expected.
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