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Old 03-19-2007, 01:38 AM
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OnceUponATime,

*My Opinion* There is a dearth of this quality of fiction writing on WB..., the sort of writing that gently tugs you into it, lowers you to the floor and then kicks you in the teeth with the outcome!

Loved it Jillian, I got the sinking feeling about half way through, just as I susepct you planned the reader would do.

My only thought is to increase your descriptive prose of Elbert. You say grin, perhaps add 'toothy grin', and 'bashfully picking at his claw/sausage like fingers.'

These are the only things I could see, and to be honest, the description of Elbert is fine - I am just being picky!

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