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Old 09-06-2015, 06:50 AM
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Originally Posted by wrc View Post
However I got confused by the music reference at the end. (?)
So glad I could help make you smile after a bummer of a day! The music reference is just an indication of what I was listening to as I wrote the piece. For some reason I like to keep track of what I listen to while writing.

I felt the opening few lines could be better, a sentence after the first thing you say just to grab our attention. Also maybe change one of the concentrations to another word, don't want to use the same descriptive word twice in such a short space of time but other than that pretty enjoyable couple minutes of reading. Thanks
Cheers; some great advice there. Very much appreciated.
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