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Old 01-28-2010, 04:26 AM
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I really liked it, and I like the theme. Just spotted one error though:
I don’t know what happened, really. Everything seemed fine. She seemed into me, and I was definitely into her. But… she just left. She just got up and walked away like nothing mattered. It’s amazing how someone can just do that. Just walk away from something. I don’t know if I wasn’t good enough or what. This sucks. There’s such a pit in my stomach. I could throw up. I wish it would go away.


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