Thread: Serpent Song
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Old 02-11-2018, 02:14 AM
IanG (Offline)
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As it stands I ask why did the men not know that its bad luck or taboo to kill a giant snake? If its that important then they should have been told about it from childhood. If they've killed a large and potentially dangerous creature then they must be adults or not far off adulthood. If the clan was threatened with famine that would make it a bit more convincing. Or could you say that snakes of that type hadn't been seen nearby for a long time? in which case young men might have forgotten the taboo, or even mistaken a taboo species for one similar but not identical, which they were allowed to hunt.

In the famine scenario, try saying your narrator has made a special effort to find food, a difficult journey or passing the lair of a carnivore, abeit with little success. It would give readers a reason to root for him.
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