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Old 02-19-2018, 01:07 PM
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'Oh, I'll get along fine!' she said sarcastically. "All I care about is the trip to Europe. Yeah, right...."


I think, too, that you are losing a reader's concern for this character when later she screams so much and acts so over the top. Let her be a little sad, maybe.

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