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Old 02-19-2018, 10:11 AM
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Originally Posted by Beesauce View Post
This is where I stopped reading.
No. I don't like the girl.
She cares about Europe more than her parents.

Why? This character would die instantly if I told the story.
Her mother would live, and go to Europe . Why does the girl care about Europe? And whats the point and does she die? Because it's an instant this character is going to have a hard life in 3.2.1-
Did you not pick-up that she was lying, to Sarah and more importantly to herself? Perhaps I have to make that more clear, or maybe if you would have kept reading, it would have become more evident.

After all, if someone's action contradict their words, which do you believe?
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