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Old 02-19-2018, 09:53 AM
Beesauce (Offline)
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“First my dad,” croaked Kaylee, spinning the steering wheel to the right and cruising down another street as a lone tear rolled down her cheek, “and now my mom!” She sniffled, rubbing at her watering eyes with a few knuckles. “I can’t bear the thought of losing her too.”

“Because you’d feel all alone?”

“No!” Kaylee snapped bitterly, pushing her back erect. “I get along just fine!” She cleared her throat. “I just don’t want to miss my vacation, is all. I’ve been looking forward to it all year. Europe. Imagine.”


This is where I stopped reading.
No. I don't like the girl.
She cares about Europe more than her parents.

Why? This character would die instantly if I told the story.
Her mother would live, and go to Europe . Why does the girl care about Europe? And whats the point and does she die? Because it's an instant this character is going to have a hard life in 3.2.1-
i didnt do it, except
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